Labeled Writing
Journals
Grace Moua
English 2105
Professor Dr. Gill
LBH Page 72: Qualitites of an Effective Paragraph
February 13, 2024
"The Best Writing is Rewriting" : 4 draft(s), 1 Mentor (Alicia Chhuon)
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(Provocative Title) The Standards of a Successful Paragraph
(Unity/Topic Sentence) The standards of a successful paragraph include unity, adequate development, and coherence. (Adequate Development/Body) Unity is the first standard of a successful paragraph, as it sets the tone and central idea through the topic sentence. Adequate development is the second standard of a successful paragraph, as it utilizes details and reasoning in a body paragraph. The last standard of a successful paragraph is coherence, which exists throughout the entirety of the paragraph with stability and key words. (Coherence/Conclusion) All in all, the standards of a successful paragraph require unity, adequate development, and coherence. (The Little Brown Handbook 72).
Grace Moua
English 2105
Professor Dr. Gill
Con #1
20 February 2024
"The Best Writing is Rewriting": 3 Draft(s), 1 Mentor (Elianna Aragon)
Works Cited
Jones, Michael A., and George W. Stone. "The U.S. Gun-Control Paradox: Gun Buyer Response To Congressional Gun-Control Initiatives." Journal of Business & Economics Research (Online), vol. 13, no. 4, 2015, pp. 167. ProQuest, http://proxy.library.cpp.edu/login?url=https://www.proquest.com/scholarly-journals/u-s-gun-control-paradox-buyer-response/docview/1722651790/se-2, doi:https://doi.org/10.19030/jber.v13i4.9449.
Key Quote: "the more advocates push for increased regulation...the more guns that are sold" (Jones, Stone 2015)
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(Provocative Title) Restrictions on Guns Encourage Americans to Purchase More
(Unity/Topic Sentence) It is expected that restrictions on guns and the gun market would discourage Americans from purchasing firearms however doing so only encourages Americans to purchase more. (Adequate Development/Body) In research done by Michael A. Jones and George W. Stone, it was found that Americans felt more encouraged to purchase guns after the Sandy Hook incident. Jones and Stone found that there were practically no regulations of the firearm market which encouraged Americans to purchase more guns following a mass shooting which included the lives of innocent children (Jones, Stone 2015). It is the lack of restrictions and regulation of guns that fails to discourage Americans from purchasing more. (Coherence/Conclusion) Overall, the lack of restrictions on the firearm market has only encouraged Americans to purchase more guns.
Grace Moua
English 2105
Professor Dr. Gill
Pro #1
20 February 2024
"The Best Writing is Rewriting": 3 Draft(s), 1 Mentor (Elianna Aragon)
Works Cited
Moriarty, Laura J., and John E. Hearne. "Exploring the relationship between support for gun control measures and understanding of gun control issues." Journal of Security Administration, vol. 21, no. 1, 1998, pp. 12-27. ProQuest, http://proxy.library.cpp.edu/login?url=https://www.proquest.com/scholarly-journals/exploring-relationship-between-support-gun/docview/195765288/se-2.
Key Quote: "it is impossible to say that understanding of gun control issues causes individuals not to support gun ownership" (Moriarty, Hearne 1998)
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(Provocative Title) The Americans Owning Guns Know Better
(Unity/Topic Sentence) In a study conducted by Laura J. Moriarty and John E. Hearne, it was discovered that the Americans who owned guns knew more about gun control issues than non-gun owners. (Adequate Development/Body) Americans who own guns having more knowledge about gun control issues demonstrates the complexity of supporting ownership and restrictions. Many people believe that gun owners care only for their rights to owning a gun rather than the lives at risk. In contrast however, many gun owners are in fact knowledgeable and demonstrate having a higher level of understanding in regards to gun control issues (Moriarty, Hearne 1998). Moriarty and Hearne's research resulted in the conclusion that gun owners aren't ignorant to the implications brought with gun control laws. (Coherence/Conclusion) Whilst Moriarty and Hearne acknowledged that the study conducted couldn't have included all confounding variables revolving gun control issues, the study effectively showed that gun owning Americans are in fact knowledgeable about issues revolving gun control.
Grace Moua
English 2105
Professor Dr. Gill
Con #2
26 February 2024
"The Best Writing is Rewriting": 2 Draft(s), 1 Mentor (Elianna Aragon)
Works Cited
Kruis, Nathan E., et al. "Firearm Ownership, Defensive Gun Usage, and Support for Gun Control: Does Knowledge Matter?" American Journal of Criminal Justice : AJCJ, vol. 48, no. 1, 2023, pp. 21-50. ProQuest, http://proxy.library.cpp.edu/login?url=https://www.proquest.com/scholarly-journals/firearm-ownership-defensive-gun-usage-support/docview/2775137451/se-2, doi:https://doi.org/10.1007/s12103-021-09644-7.
Key Quote: "more restrictive gun control will do little to reduce crime or to save lives" (Kruis 2023)
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(Provocative Title) Unqualified Gun Users Threaten America's Safety
(Unity/Topic Sentence) Many Americans often blame gun owners for the horrific attacks of violence seen through gun use yet those same Americans fail to see that it is the unqualified gun users who threaten America's safety. (Adequate Development/Body) In research and study done by Nathan E. Kruis, he found that many gun crimes are committed by unqualified Americans who do not meet the regulations. Those unqualified gun users are often under aged or hold previous criminal records. Additionally, it was discovered that 10% of the gun owners in Kruis' study had no formal or informal gun training (Kruis 2023). Ill-trained gun owners are at a greater risk of improperly using and storing their firearms thus threatening America's safety. Many Americans support limiting the sale of firearms or enacting stricter regulations such as increased screening of buyers and sellers however these regulations fail to address the unqualified gun users who continue get access to dangerous firearms. Increasing the regulations would only further entice unqualified Americans into using guns without proper training or knowledge. Kruis emphasized how gun control threatens "male intimacy" and male identity which would only lead to more unqualified individuals wanting to improperly handle firearms. (Coherence/Conclusion) Imposing harsher regulations on the buying and selling of firearms is an understandable want of Americans however, those same regulations would only encourage more unqualified Americans into improperly using firearms and thus putting America's safety at risk.
Grace Moua
English 2105
Professor Dr. Gill
Pro #2
26 February 2024
"The Best Writing is Rewriting": 2 Draft(s), 1 Mentor (Elianna Aragon)
Works Cited
Pettys, Todd E. "The N.R.A.'s Strict-Scrutiny Amendments." Iowa Law Review, vol. 104, no. 3, 2019, pp. 1455-1482. ProQuest, http://proxy.library.cpp.edu/login?url=https://www.proquest.com/scholarly-journals/n-r-s-strict-scrutiny-amendments/docview/2212658368/se-2.
Key Quote: "tailor the language of their proposed" (Pettys 2019)
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(Provocative Title) The NRA Pushes States to Implement Gun Restrictions
(Unity/Topic Sentence) In an interesting turn of events, the National Rifle Association known as the NRA has been pushing state courts to implement gun restrictions. (Adequate Development/Body) The NRA pushed for states and judges to "evaluate gun restrictions under "the highest standards of justification"" which may have been initially pushed for self-benefit. The NRA's statement fails to take into consideration the fact that the state courts they are encouraging to evaluate gun restrictions will in fact be evaluating gun restrictions but not the lessening of said restrictions. State courts have instead been using their state laws to further impose "reasonable regulations" with statements of how the states will be utilizing their "police power to protect the health, safety and morals of the citizenry" (Pettys 2019). With the use of police power, states such as Louisiana have prohibited concealed weapons and Connecticut has banned assault weapons. The NRA most likely didn't expect states to be using their statement to ban and prohibit the use of guns. Regardless, the NRA asked states and judges the NRA claimed to be "anti-gun" to evaluate gun restrictions and the states did so. (Coherence/Conclusion) Overall, Petty's article proposed an interesting perspective of the NRA pushing states to implement gun restrictions.
Grace Moua
English 2105
Professor Dr. Gill
Con #3
26 February 2024
"The Best Writing is Rewriting": 2 Draft(s), 1 Mentor (Elianna Aragon)
Works Cited
Anderson, Joe. "The Extraordinary Ethics of Self-Defence: Embodied Vulnerability and Gun Rights among Transgender Shooters in the United States." Ethnos, vol. 88, no. 5, 2023, pp. 1036-1053. ProQuest, http://proxy.library.cpp.edu/login?url=https://www.proquest.com/scholarly-journals/extraordinary-ethics-self-defence-embodied/docview/2894070112/se-2, doi:https://doi.org/10.1080/00141844.2021.2013281.
Key Quote: "Fear motivates them to become involved in a political fight" (Anderson 2023)
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(Provocative Title) Vulnerable Minorities Need Guns
(Unity/Topic Sentence) It is commonly known that minority groups are more likely to encourage stricter gun laws however, vulnerable minorities actually need guns. (Adequate Development/Body) In an article written by Joe Anderson, he brings a unique perspective to gun rights in regard to minority groups needing guns to feel safe during times of vulnerability. Anderson depicts many real-life instances of people of color or people from the LGBTQ community who fear for their lives and look to guns as a form of self-defense. By limiting gun access, the ability for these minority groups to feel safe whether it be merely walking down a busy street or going out with friends depletes immensely. Anderson even speaks of the Pink Pistols which is a shooting club in Massachusetts specifically for the LGBTQ community following the mass shooting at an LGBTQ night club in Orlando, Florida (Anderson 2023). Groups like the Pink Pistols wouldn't be able to give support and provide comfort to members of the LGBTQ community if gun restrictions were to increase. Additionally, laws cannot protect queer Americans or people of color from prejudice thus, guns serve as a form of protection for these communities. (Coherence/Conclusion) All in all, it is not only the stereotypical white male who wants to maintain gun rights but it is also all of the vulnerable minority groups who need guns for protection.
Grace Moua
English 2105
Professor Dr. Gill
Pro #3
26 February 2024
"The Best Writing is Rewriting": 2 Draft(s), 1 Mentor (Elianna Aragon)
Works Cited
Smith, R. D., and John C. Welch. "Seeking the Peace: Anti-Gun Violence Cadres, Concepts, and Connections in Pittsburgh." Society, vol. 60, no. 1, 2023, pp. 54-67. ProQuest, http://proxy.library.cpp.edu/login?url=https://www.proquest.com/scholarly-journals/seeking-peace-anti-gun-violence-cadres-concepts/docview/2780587023/se-2, doi:https://doi.org/10.1007/s12115-022-00783-z.
Key Quote: "Where there is a failure to perceive a common humanity, it is a short step toward employment of violence" (Smith, Welch 2023)
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(Provocative Title) Racial Attacks in Pittsburgh Proves Change is Needed
(Unity/Topic Sentence) Throughout Pittsburgh's history, there has been many horrendous incidents of targeted attacks towards the Black community and change is desperately needed. (Adequate Development/Body) R. D. Smith and John C. Welch bring concern over the horrendous use of guns on innocent members of society and how changes need to happen. There has been increasing and concerning amounts of gun violence in Pittsburgh over the last decade which concerns many in the Black community who feel as though there is a lack of Black empowerment by state government. Prejudice and marginalization against Black and Native populations have occurred all throughout Pittsburgh's history yet it continues to exist in recent times with a mass shooting occurring in just April of 2022 (Smith, Welch 2023). Whilst there have been some alterations in Pittsburgh's laws following George Floyd and the Black Lives Matter movement, the Pittsburgh government has yet to demonstrate full support for the black community. Restricting guns or placing regulations on guns would be able to save the Black community from the hardships caused by unnecessary hate. (Coherence/Conclusion) Overall, the racial attacks in Pittsburgh towards the Black community shows the need for state governments to stand up for their communities.